TIME WEIGHTS, FOR EVERYMAN
TIME WEIGHTS, FOR EVERYMANHow time leaves me bleak :my body's too weak,old joints are not oiled,the pate's far too boiled,and without those damn teeth I can't thpeak !Alan McAlpine Douglas
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Good attempt at rhyme, but you seem to be off beat a little with this one. Try reciting outloud, and write it down using punctuation and line breaks as guidelines of how exactly you would like this to...
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Dear Quiux,You are very kind. Seems you have taken my ditty in the spirit it was intended !LoveAlan
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Dear Paura,Thanks for your comments.I did, I did ! Reads fine to me, in its light-hearted way.And yeth, I did mean thpeak, cuth of the lithp cauthed by lack of teeth !I'm new here, but have been...
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ok, on that speak/thpeak thing I really wasn't sure, but pointed it out, because i'm notorious for typos. Partially because I have bad eye sight to start with and I tend to sit in the dark with just...
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Dear Paura,Got it, and in any case you had no way of knowing my whacky sense of !I must insist that you use a desk light to the side when in the computer, no wonder you have bad sight ! I recommend...
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welcome to The Versifier.Nice kickoff with your poem.Humor is always welcomed .Peace,Yoly
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Dear Yolee,Thank you for the poem. I hope I can fit in here, I find it difficult sometimes to remain serious !LoveAlan
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Hey Alan!I just knew that the title HAD to be a tip-off to what would follow: I was right. This is a great piece on human frailty, revealed! Well done, my friend. Good to see so many comments on it,...
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Dear Lenham,Thank you so much, I am normally very good at getting names right, I have corrected.Dion ? Of Belmonts fame ? I was always curious about his double standards - SHE is Runaround Sue (bad)...
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Okay I totally piggy backed into here with Alan, I just wanted to say I liked this poem.
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Dear Jamie,Thank you, seems I struck a chord with quite a few folks.If one can't laugh about it, I reckon one is dead anyway !LoveAlan
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Thats what I like about, people always show old age as some thing to be dreaded, but it doesnt have to be.btw I love this emotie
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Dear Jamie,One of the better ones !Once bought a postcard : "No, life isn't what I want, haven't you got something else ?"LoveAlan
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i'm glad i found this.It's well contained and i love the lisp at the end.i look forward to more of you because whacky rocks!
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Perthonally, I like a little listhping now & again....:) Nice humor.
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Dear Christine and LizbethAnn,Thank you both, I will try to oblige.LoveAlan
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Alan time is a curse that the young can never understand, nor should they.Can totally relate to this one!!!!Welcome to our poetic refuge!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Dear DP,Thank you for the comments and the welcome.I have scoured the internet on many occasions to find good poetry sites, but only just found this one. Strange.LoveAlan
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Please, let's stick to comments about the work and not about another's crit. It works out better that way.Cheers,Yoly
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